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Extended (Long) Hamburger Paragraph



Once you've written a solid five-sentence paragraph, expanding it into an extended paragraph is just a matter of adding a few more sentences to what you've already written.

If you're writing about the food, you might want to talk about all the restaurants. If you're writing about the water sports, you can add what they are.

After elaborating, you need to write a specific example. Again, finding specific examples is another problem students have in writing essays. Specific means one, and you need to discuss one time, one place, one event.

If you're writing about a resort, you might write about the first time you rode a horse or went jet skiing. If you're writing about the negative effect of video games, you might write about a brother or a friend whoses addiction to video games caused a problem, like falling grades.

Again, try to focus on one person, one time, one event, one place that illustrates what you are discussing. To write an effective long paragraph or essay, you must begin with a solid five-sentence paragraph.

Using that, you add details and examples to each of the reasons you mention in the shorter paragraph. For instance, if I write that I love New York because it has such good food, the details would include the fact that there are a lot of ethnic neighborhoods in New York, including Chinatown and Little Italy, where the food is cooked as it was in those countries.

I would then add a specific example. This would include a specific time and a specific restaurant that illustrates the detail. It might be something, "For example, when I went to New York last month I went to a restaurant in Korean neighorhood in Queens where they served the best bulgogi beef I've ever eaten.

Again, for the example, make it specific, a single time, a single place, a single event.


Example of Extended Paragraph

Title



Topic Sentence -- the Top Bun

Type your topic sentence here. Be sure to limit it.



First Reason with Details and Example     

First Reason -- The Lettuce

Background or least important reason

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Details, Quotes or Statistics

In this section, you provide details about the first reason.
It may include the location, a number of restaurants or, in the case of academic studies,
quotes from experts that support you first reason.


First Reason -- Example

In this case, you want a specific something specific.
You can use the transition below if it's an example, or you can create your own transition, such as "one the day I proposed...."
Again, this must be specific -- one time, one place, one event.

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Second Reason with Details and Example  

Second Reason -- the Tomato

In this section, give a more important reason, but not the most important

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Details, Quotes or Statistics

In this section, you provide details about the second reason.
Again, it may include the location, a number of restaurants or, in the case of academic studies,
quotes from experts that support you second reason.



Second Reason -- Example

Again, you want a specific something specific.
You can use a dropdown transition below or one of your own,
but you want to make it clear that this is a specific time, place or event.

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Most Important with Details and Example   

Third Reason -- the Meat

This is the most important reason

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Details, Quotes or Statistics



Third Reason -- Example

Again, you want a specific something specific.
You can use a dropdown transition below or one of your own,
but you want to make it clear that this is a specific time, place or event.

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Paragraph Conclusion

Conclusion -- Bottom Bun

Summarize the reasons in order
Try to end with a strong sentence

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